text: how do i fix the grammar in this sentence? this sentence is using inclusive language—quoting from biased material  back in the 1400s, the laws governing the people were quite specific: “all men shall tithe 10% to the church and pay taxes every six months. all men can attend school until they are 16 years of age.” substitute "people" or "citizens" for "men" if you're trying to re-write this sentence to be inclusive.  otherwise i don't see any grammatical errors.  there are a few style points - i would rewrite the first part to: "[back - optional] in the 1400s, laws governing all citizens were quite specific:"