`   Though I agree that 108's edits make the text worse, and I think starting the sentence with ``but`` is, in principle, a good stylistic choice, I believe there are still two minor substantive issues in the first sentence of the paragraph that may have misled 108. The first issue could perhaps be addressed by substituting an em dash for the comma preceding ``and ultimately``. With this sentence, any choice will doubtless have advantages and disadvantages but this comma—presumably intended to reduce the cognitive load on the reader by indicating that what follows is not part of the phrase beginning with ``by`` but is a supplementary addition to the non-restictive relative clause. Unfortunately the comma may also signal the end of a relative clause, leading to problems in parsing the sentence—and increasing the cognitive load resulting from temporary ambiguity. I think an em dash would reduce this ambiguity, since it does not by default indicate the end of a relative clause.  I also wonder if the writer really meant to use ``and`` (rather than ``but``) to join * ``attempted to address the labour shortages following the Black Death in England by restricting the movement of labourers`` and  * ``ultimately led to the state becoming responsible for the support of the poor``. I would surmise that there is an intended contrast between the intent of the legislation and its actual effect. Of course, changing ````and`` to ``but`` would probably mean changing the ``but`` at the beinning of the following sentence.   `