  I really did a lot of re-organizing (hope that's alright with you guys), if you could please read through the whole article again and let me know what you think    == REPHRASING TO MAKE NEUTRAL ==  I have read the whole article, still one big problem > when we talk about the services provided by the foundation, I think the style is relatively biased towards helping the foundation as if we are one of their staff. I have rephrased the support services bit, and also the finances bit > think these are 2 parts which are relatively more neutral. Biggest problem is the target groups, can someone have a look at it?  I'll give an example that i encounter most to illustrate my point. I.e. saying that aids patients will be treated by well-trained social workers is definitely a biased - how do we know that the social workers are well-trained besides from what the organization tells us. hope point is taken. thanks! i think that's it for tonight. will check this page again tomorrow. don't give up, the last day!! good luck to us all! )  