`  === Initial comments === I won't be able to make it through the full article tonight, so here's some preliminary comments on the early sections. I hope to finish tomorrow. So far this article looks good in terms of completeness and depth of research, and I'm learning a lot reading it. So far my biggest concerns are with clarity in the prose. I've done some copyediting myself as I've gone along for both grammatical and stylistic reasons. Please double-check me to make sure I haven't inadvertently added any new errors, and please revert any changes you disagree with.  *``Asian Americans began to attend U.S. military academies and the first incidents that would lead to Asian Americans being awarded the Medal of Honor``  to say that ``Asian Americans began to attend ... the first incidents that would lead to Asian Americans being awarded the Medal of Honor`` doesn't seem complete. Perhaps rewrite as ``Asian Americans began to attend U.S. military academies, and the first Asian Americans were awarded the Medal of Honor``? * does not seem like a reliable source. I'd suggest simply removing the ``Pierce's picture hangs in the Gettysburg Museum`` as it seems a bit trivial anyway. *``Pierce's, and other Asian-Pacific Islander soldiers of the Civil War, actions was the subject of a House of Representatives resolution``  this sentence needs to be rewritten a bit for grammar, but I feel like this one could also use a little more context. Perhaps mention the year, the fact that it passed, and that the resolution was to honor them. ``In 2007, the US House passed a resolution honoring the actions of Pierce and other...`` *``Asian Americans were drafted as ``non-whites`` filling out the ``white quota`` into the National Army``  this confuses menon-whites were used to fill the quota of whites? *`` they too would not see combat``  who is ``they`` hereAsian Americans, or Asian, Hispanic and Native Americans? It also appears to contradict the next sentence. I wonder if it would be better to write ``few of them would see combat``. *`` Private Henry Chinn, who was killed in action in the Argonne Forest as part of the Lost Battalion,[54][55] and Sergeant Sing Kee, another member of the Lost Battalion, who earned the Distinguished Service Cross for his actions.[56][57] and Sergeant Major Tokutaro Nishimura Slocum, who fought in the 328th Infantry Regiment, 82d Infantry Division``  this does not appear to be a complete sentenceright now it's a list of three nouns with long modifiers. There's also a period where a comma is probably wanted. *``In the Navy, at its peak more than 5,700 Filipinos enlisted during World War I``  what does ``at its peak`` mean here? Did 5,700 Filipinos enlist total during the war, or was there one ``peak`` day when 5,700 Filipinos enlisted?`