` :It couldn't be worse than it is now. I thought you did fine yesterday. It looks like Teammm didn't note your comment above before editing it back and adding the wikilink.  :By ``moved into the second graf``, do you mean that grafs 1 & 2 should be combined as they are now, or that the exception info should precede the sentence about DOMA? I think providing detail about jurisdictions before shifting to the denial of federal recognition reads more smoothly. The material about jurisdictions is overly detailed as well. I'd drop the names of the tribes and find a way to say the issue is on the ballot in 4 states without worrying about initiative vs. referendum. I guess we're struck with the CA exception.   `