Ice cream with thin layers of chocolate so it ' s like crunchy <| sep |> I think shits about to go down people ! !!!<| sep |> Yes but he was initially an import , and is still a Danish national . <| sep |> That ' s much better than it was and shows you ' ve done a lot of work . A detailed critique will have to wait , because I ' m about to pack up and go home , but just posting that I think it works well at a single glance , which it what it ' s supposed to do . ETA The most obvious issue with the first paragraph from a flow pov is ' Nat ' s ' should probably be ' she '. I really can ' t see much wrong with this apart from the above nitpick . Maybe I ' m just knackered after most of a week at work no Turkey Day for us Brits but actually , as someone looking for good books , this passes the ' would I read this ' test . Well done .