Its an apartment so it may be building angle . My one window faces west . Its rather nice for mornings . <| sep |> Lol even Yamcha is flying effortlessly in the opening credits scene . <| sep |> good for you . more people here should think like this . But the question was more like given both fit your preferences which one would you choose <| sep |> you light up the water <| sep |> It ' s Overwatchdojo , <| sep |> Ricochet 2 is a kindof joke that means HL 3 <| sep |> I don ' t really read romance and I ' m a straight guy , so I doubt I ' m in your target audience , but I ' ll leave some thoughts here anyway . If you don ' t find them useful , feel free to ignore them . Besides , after the reaming out her captain gave her for wearing her favourite pair of purple contact lenses on the job , she wanted to make sure she was the paragon of a good police officer . For whatever reason , this read more like the opening of a parody than a serious story . A policewoman wearing purple contact lenses to her job and she ' s not new to it she ' s been at enough traffic accidents to know what a first responder should do , and then getting told off for it is just so off the wall as an introduction for a character . Maybe you ' re doing it intentionally to subvert expectations , but I guess it just seems silly to me . She ran beside the old sedan , using her phone ' s flash for light , and she saw something that she lacked the facilities to fully comprehend . andThat wasn ' t the disturbing thing Jack had seen her fair share of mangled bodies . No , the passenger was not lying prone , not in shock . Instead , she had her head nestled in her unconscious companion ' s neck , her hands wrapped around his head , pulling him even closer to her than the impact had . As of right now , Jack has no idea that the passenger is a vampire . It ' s entirely in character for Mavis to be shockedscareddistraught after the crash and hugging the driver , or burying her head in the crook of his neck maybe even sobbing . As long as those are still halfway possible , Jack shouldn ' t be more disturbed by how Mavis reacts to the trauma than the sight of a ruined arm or a potentially dead guy . She ' s seen other accidents before , anyway . Jack felt a primal fear in her , something profound , like nothing she ' d ever felt before . Quick reflexes hard won through years of martial arts ended with her pushing the wooden stake through the woman ' s heart , its passage made easy by the previously broken ribs and torn flesh . This doesn ' t feel realistic to me at all . Also , aren ' t the splints described as ' two thin sticks '? That doesn ' t sound consistent with a stake that pierces through to the heart . Jack ' s character isn ' t super consistent so far is she super invested in acting professionally and following rules , or not ? but going from ' let me splint you ' to ' I ' m gonna stab you for freaking out and backing away ' in a split second seems unrealistic , especially if she ' s under some sort of magical fear effect , and doubly so if she ' s learned martial arts . Usually they teach you to drop back and raise your guard if you feel threatened , not to stab whoever ' s nearby with whatever weapon is in reach . Canines that were about an inch apart . I feel like that ' s too short of a distance , but I could be wrong . It seems like an easy thing to double check though for you , at least to get an estimate of the distance between a woman ' s canines , you can measure your own mouth . All at once , she realised that either she was going crazy , or Mavis was an actual vampire . You should probably try to establish Jack ' s character a bit more , so that her jumping to conclusions like this doesn ' t come across as much as authorial fiat . Maybe Jack has an interest in myths or something , and has a book on Eastern European folklore in bag that she thinks about while on her motorbike . You can probably come up with something better , but think about how you personally would react in that situation . Would your first thought be ' everything I believe is a lie ', or would it be ' I notice I am confused '? I ' m not really sure about the rest of the chapter . In large part , it fails to move me much because the preamble didn ' t hook me in and so I don ' t really know if Jack ' s behaviour is normal for her or not . It ' s consistent with some parts of her actions , and inconsistent with others . I do want to add that it ' s well written from a technical perspective . There ' s no big spelling or grammar errors that I noticed , at least , and normally I ' m pretty good at picking them up and the flow of the sentences was good .