Men are cunts ? WHAT ! ? NO WAY ! ? Shake it off , it ' s just that they ' re insecure that ' s all . And think about all the nice people you ' re missing out on since you ' re too afraid to join voice ? I know you girls have the short straw here , but these are the same morons who call me kid smh <| sep |> uSheldrob Scrub , comment here if you still need one . <| sep |> RCA , Magnavox , Sony , etc . <| sep |> Shitty Shitpost Award op <| sep |> I won ' t be surprised if your internet history that the GCHQ and NSA have been collecting for over a decade somehow gets leaked along with all that data from your ISP to all those agencies in the article . <| sep |> Time of death would be nice <| sep |> This is really good . Having a story rely solely on dialogue is s risky choice but you made it work to your advantage . In just the conversation between inside Ox and Jensen , you establish a decent but of works building without pulling focus from the immediacy of what ' s going on , you add suspense with the timer , and add conflict with the introduction of outside Ox . Again , that ' s impressive . The little tidbits add flavor that make this work as an engaging piece of short fiction . The record , the calendar , and the coffee are real world touches that do more than add to the world count . You use each one to tell a little bit about the characters and the world while not making a show of them as plot devices . I guess I could day to work on the dialogue a bit , but that ' s just being an asshole . There were a couple of spots in the conversation where the stress between inside Ox and Jensen didn ' t seem authentic . It may be a part of their dynamic , but as the reader , it doesn ' t give me anything but two characters bickering . That ' s really my only gripe . You give me a world with a present threat to the characters and an internal conflict that isn ' t bullshit and you don ' t try to tie everything into a nice bow at the end . That ' s probably the most impressive part , allowing the story to remain open at the end . All in all , this is a solid story . Polish the conversations a little and I ' ll think you ' ll be good .