Nope , technically it ' s still illegal even in Colorado and Washington . It ' s just that the federal government has chosen not to enforce those laws in states that have voted to legalize it . <| sep |> No no , it ' s just a coincidence that we highly protect the manner in which a highly influential official of a government entity conducts himself . Really , the secret is that the lizard people are in the whitehouse with their brain scanners , and Trump has to avoid becoming a lizard people . Also , spez added s <| sep |> Hey Terlin , I ' m new to Destrutive Readers , and don ' t know how to do linebyline edits when it ' s not a google doc , but I ' ll do my best here . First , the line Something exciting well , not really exciting , but at least it wasn ' t boring was happening . I think the format of this sentence is awkward , and maybe was happening could go before the em dash . In the next paragraph , the side by side sentences of For what , I can ' t imagine next to Maybe for the loud , drunken louts . don ' t really make sense together , because the narrator can imagine , and he does , and his consideration is quite logical , too . That being said , I like the narrator ' s removal from the scene , unaware of what these careful lines of white powder are . Maybe you can play with this theme a little more the tension between the narrator not knowing anything about what ' s going on and yet being drawn to imitate all of it , so as not to be identified , drives the story . It gives me the idea that really the narrator is just interested in the game of not being spotted , but beyond that he doesn ' t really care at all about what ' s going on . Amusement , then , is the sole goal . In the next paragraph when the narrator says Just as well , I suppose when he ' s not caught , it gives me a vibe of apathy . Is that what you ' re looking for ? It seems to me that with the words , Finally , something exciting , the narrator might be a little more invested ? This point becomes even more relevant with the next lines of I focus hard , following each of their motions best I can . This sounds very invested . My last question is why would the narrator be distracted when he is following the other man . To just say that he is distracted , with little to no evidence as to why or by what , feels too rushed . Perhaps the title could be , Finally , Something Exciting . Finally , the opportunity for external entertainment has arrived . When it ' s over , oh well , just back to the waiting game for whatever comes along next . I hope this is helpful !