Your response is very much appreciated . Yeah i see what you mean most of my scripts and completed projects are in a sense basic although there are Twists for lack of a better term . I think i like telling stories this way . For me they are exercises in execution . I want the them to feel familiar and hope to see if i can still keep the viewer engaged enough through the process . I don ' t want to treat my audience as if they are stupid so i paint the picture early With bills and Blue shoes if you ' re paying attention you know whats going on and what ' s going to happen . for me its like a watching a train crash in front of you in slow motion you know what ' s going to happen you watch anyway you hope that something miraculous will take place and the crash will be averted but deep in your heart you know what ' s going down . It warms my heart to see you think im on the right path developing my skills . Every piece i write every time i direct something i come out stronger in all regards . Thats all i want is to be better than yesterday . When I make it to the editing room i ' ll see if cuttin out the phone call dims things a bit . I ' ve had multiple people read the script and only 410 said they knew danny was in the house before the Phone call shot of the shoe . For the majority the phone call was the starting of the I think i know what ' s going to happen and the shoe was the nail in the coffin . Some didn ' t even know what was really happening until they read the line about the shoe . astute film goers such as yourself who have a good working knowledge of structure and the use of plot points beats will most likely pick up on what ' s happening early on and as i said im fine with that . The phone call and line about the tv might be a bit much i ' ll agree Danny does say they are going to the movies and in the living room there is a bag of popcorn from a theater spilled across the floor I could realistically cut the line about the television . But that line was also an opportunity to have the father complain and show some character . Blah blah . If you enjoyed this script I request your opinion on the one linked below I wrote it almost a year and a half after Blue shoes Please let me know what you think . 6 ERVXh 3 aEFUTUVxSmcview ? uspsharing