You sound alot like Cinnamon Toast Ken lol . Alright first off , I like your enthusiasm as far as the video goes , but there is something off when it comes to your commentary . I think it has to do with you sounding like you are struggling with something to say next . Perhaps this is because the video is 22 minutes long , and I am sure it took you 40 minutes to record . I know how hard it is to keep up commentary for that long . You will definitely improve over time with this lol . Also , your mic sounds perfect , And I think the cuts are pretty good , but perhaps you should have cut the video when you made it to the end of where the demo ended , just for time saving reasons . Hope this bit of feedback helps