TN definitely has something to do with it . I believe there is a conspiracy to win the National Championships next weekend . <| sep |> Obviously . This isn ' t the Nalanda of old . <| sep |> dsgridadd is used for . well , adding , as the name implies . You can ' t use it to set a grid space to true or false . If you add false to a value , it ' s going to stay as the same value , because false is 0 . Use dsgridset instead . <| sep |> I just wanted to say how awesome this was . Those first two lines pulled me in so fast , it was nuts . I don ' t know if I like the details about the friends death . It felt abruptly out of place , and not in a good way . It kind of reminds me of Elizabeth Bishops poem One Art . Bishop rewrote the poem something like 16 times and looking at all of her drafts you can see how certain details about her mothers death get slimmed down in an extraordinary fashion . The first draft and the final draft are almost nothing alike . Which just goes to show the power of revision . I recommend going and reading all of those drafts so that you can see the evolution of the poem and see what I ' m talking about . It will help you figure out how you can change it artistically the way she did . Also try to do something about the ending . Keep the poem on track Not every poem needs to go ' shockingly ' dark and personal . This poem really has potential , keep up the good work .