Prise de la Shibe <| sep |> Love the love <| sep |> The ones you failed to provide a single piece of evidence for other than your feebleminded accusations . Those . <| sep |> I ' m online now if you are online currently ! I ' m so sorry I didn ' t see this until now ! ! D <| sep |> Look , some of these are fine as they have a point and reveal actionsattitudes that we can ' t always find I the dialogue . That being said yes there are too many . And another serious thing you need to consider is the clarity of your dialogue narration . They are particularly difficult to follow , using multiple gendered pronouns confused me as to who was who . You also use the same ' as ' formation for the first two . Overall the only advice I can give is delete some , improve the others .