You just broke every playstation player ' s heart . <| sep |> I have extreme sympathy for you . <| sep |> Game is Dying Light <| sep |> Oh , another song also by Motley Crue is Nona . It ' s not on youtube anymore as far as I know , but it can be easily found on Spotify <| sep |> I named mine Hansen . <| sep |> i think most of them are less than $ 1 used if one wants printed books . <| sep |> as the breeze softly blows her hair . Sorry , just don ' t , unless there is some significance to this . The grass is green and lively . I hope you ' re not filming this anytime soon . since it ' s winter . It ' d be better to take it out , unless , again , there is some significance to it . A nervous young man stands awkwardly across the street . He is pacing back and forth trying to convince himself of something . His hair is combed and he ' s gripping a bouquet of flowers . Is he standing awkwardly or pacing ? I advice pacing , considering that standing awkwardly is not something people do . Also , make sure we understand that he ' s been watching her , otherwise we don ' t know that it ' s the the perfect opportunity . He runs his fingers through his hair . This is usually something people do when they ' re stressed . Trying taking a deep breath instead ? I don ' t know , something else . He has his hair combed , after all . He ' s shocked . Confused . Scared . Are you just going to have him stand around looking shocked , confused , and scared ? He should actually be doing something at this time , like trying to shake his body or reenter it or SOMETHING . Also , I ' m surprised that the girl just left after witnessing someone being run over by a car . Make sure you have the truck driver have , like , a small panic or something before ditching Lucas ' s corpse . Right now , in the script , he just leaves and then sees the flowers floating . Keep in mind he also needs a reason to turn around . He smiles and starts to walk away . I don ' t think this is the honest reaction . I imagine him being more determined to get this girl , but not really smiling . The part where she gets banned . for having books levitate behind her ? Make it clear that it looks like she ' s doing it otherwise , it doesn ' t work . Why is he eating ghost chips ? Where did he get these ghost chips ? I get that it ' s a joke , but . what ? I like the idea of him looking angry at Matthew for being a cunt and stealing his girl , but try to find a different way . creak ! Okay , please build this up more . The audience has seen the shadows moving around from an invisible ghost ? But for Matthew , all he has witnessed was something creaking . That isn ' t enough to scare anyone . On scaring Matthew Lucas is kinda being a dick without repercussions , isn ' t he ? Also , why can he make himself visible when he ' s scaring people , but not when he ' s trying to get with the girl ? How did he know he could make himself visible ? You ' ve already shown that floating things freak people out . Why not make things float again ? Then , after he ' s done being a dick , why is his next emotion being defeated ? I would understand if he had been actually trying to get her attention , but the last thing he did was scare off some dude . Also , the flowerbed has HIS name on it ? That ' s weird , dude . No one would do that . Even if you were dead and you were trying to say it ' s from you . You would put the name of the person you ' re sending it to . And also , we never learned his name , so it ' d be weird seeing the name Lucas on the flowerbed unless you ' ve read the script . The ending . Hm . The flowers . If you were a girl , and you just saw some guy had arranged flowers for you right after you died , would that be your reaction ? Also , it ' s KINDA his fault she died , isn ' t it ? I ' d be fucking PISSED . Now , if he had made a real effort to save her right before she died ? That would be different .