The cancer of lower prices ? Sure sucks they destroyed all the Mom PopsTM who were paying $ 20 an hour with comprehensive benefits . <| sep |> Kiitos spez kun tulit kommentoimaan tt asiaa tnnekin . <| sep |> Hey there . Landing page doesn ' t look too bad . I think your point about lack of focus is correct , but the main issue seems to be with expressing the value more persuasively . Logo looks a bit cheapugly . Just keep the wordmark . Might want to drop the The . Like TheFacebook . Improve Your FASHION STYLE is an okay headline . It ' s the main value proposition of your product . But it may be a little too vague . How are you going to do that ? Am I going to get fashion tips to improve my outfits ? Precise references for things I should buy that will be in my budget ? While the headline clearly puts your product in a category , it needs to be a bit more refined to grab people ' s attention . Your online personal stylist , straight from your phone Mkay . That ' s another summary statement of what your product is . But I think you need to do more than that right off the bat , because you ' ve got some important objections to cover . People are shy . They won ' t want to show themselves . What are you doing to solve that ? So you might need to insist more on the privacy aspect . Maybe you also need to prove how you ' re better than just buying a random fashion magazine and buying everything there , etc . personal stylist gets you part of the way there , but you might need to expand on that a little . Not sure how your call to action works here . If it ' s an iOS app , then I ' d expect to see an Apple Store link . Here I have to fill in a form , etc . Maybe it ' s not necessary there ? A fashion network at your fingertips I don ' t know what that means . What ' s the end result of that ? What ' s the outcome ? What am I getting from the network ? People are already on a bunch of networks . Not sure they want one more . Their desire certainly isn ' t to be on more networks . They probably want to find clothes that fit them better at the right budget that they couldn ' t find themselves elsewhere vetted by fashionsavvy people . The network is immaterial . I ' d drop that whole section . How Does It Work ? Probably a good type of section to have here , but I ' m not sure the execution is good . You need to make it more of a before and after . 1 Guy takes a selfie where he ' s dressed like shit adapt for girls depending on your target market , though I assume mostly guys because girls do that stuff with their girlfriends . 2 Gets feedback . Emphasize the quality of the feedback . Why is it better than your mom telling you you look good . 3 Guy looks better , feels more confident , gets more attentionchicksguys let ' s face it , that ' s probably why people will use it . Of course , you can do that in a more or less subtle way . Why so many fields in the optin ? Do you need all the information ? Just get an email . Background image of a girl . Not sure you want to go with a unisex approach with a product like that . That ' s about it .