I bought gold edition for 5 dollars when it was on sale <| sep |> But you can speak english , which is a foreign language to you , so whats the oddness ? <| sep |> Similar situation here haha <| sep |> Yes , the traffic has increased in the past days and I think they have a problem with a bug that makes the site toggle off for a couple of seconds . <| sep |> Texan carry a gun by force of habit . Would go on a first date with one probably <| sep |> Be reasonable . Meeting in the middle at times like this is honorable . <| sep |> What ' s your gamertag ? Well work it out later . <| sep |> So , it all feels a little disjointed . The elements aren ' t really adding up to a movie I ' m dying to see . I think best friend isn ' t a very primal connection either . A stronger connection makes its more dramatic . I also think trapped in a foreign city is too bland , too . You need some sort of detail for the reader to grasp onto . And city leader is kind of odd , too . Are we talking about a town council person or the mayor or just a really empowered city park manager ? Find some concrete details and use them to add some color to your story . Also , nervous is kind of a weird character flaw . I think you want to pick something that ' s going to be a challenge for the character to overcome in order to meet his goal . It ' s also a weird trait for an explorer . Being an explorer means being adventurous so though you ' re trying to mix it up , since it doesn ' t fit , it slows down the reader when they ' re trying to evaluate your idea . I do actually like the title Dead City not sure how it connects to the story but sometimes a good title can inspire something even better . This is a tricky story to figure out . One of the best things to do at this point , if this is a story you really want to tell , is to just write this 100 ways . And don ' t be afraid to change every element . I think what you want to get to it something like this logline for the Denzel Washington movie Deja Vu After a ferry is bombed in New Orleans , an A . T . F . agent joins a unique investigation using experimental surveillance technology to find the bomber , but soon finds himself becoming obsessed with one of the victims . Like that ' s pretty clear to me . A detective obsessed with a case . I can SEE that . So try to find the elements of your story that a reader can immediately see . It doesn ' t mean that the story has to be cliched , it just means using words , ideas , etc . that telegraph meaning to the reader . Good luck .