No , you were just in western Russia . s <| sep |> Some people just assume the technology of yesterday is going to be the technology of the future forever and ever lol <| sep |> Dark souls 1 is more about you overcoming overwhelming odds in a dying world , that exists with or without you . Dark souls 2 is about you dying over and over . It feels like the devs just wanted dark souls 2 to be hard , and not fun . I ' m ready for the downvotes , but I tried , I put 30 hours into that game . I made the effort and was just kicked right back into lordran , where the fun is . <| sep |> You use enigmatic billionaire twice . That ' s a little distracting . Also , a tiny thing , but for a billionaire , I ' d go with . has more than one skeleton in his apartmentsized closet , something to tickle the money angle . Jillian finds herself in the grip of an undeniable passion and uncontrollable desire to submit to Thorpe ' s every whimI think having both undeniable passion and uncontrollable desire in the same sentence is a little on the flabby side . I ' d probably trim the first to get right to the point of wanting to be dominated and disciplined . Over all it ' s pretty good . I like the setup with her knowing people ' s desires . You could probably play on that for a cliffhanger to get people to pick up the book just to find out what ' s in Jack ' s head . Good luck and happy Thanksgiving !