I ' m going to be brutally honest here because I think you ' re interesting and have potential . First off you ' re rhyming scheme is boring and inconsistent . AABAAB . ABAAB with three rhymes all being the same word . Secondly adding a little internal rhyming could definitely help . Having a few words with similar sounding middle sounds in the middle of your lines helps with flow . This doesn ' t have to be forced or held to a rigid system . Finally I ' m seeing no consultant syllable count which is far from necessary but will make everything just sound and look better . CheersA Man with a useless degree <| sep |> Hit reg in cs go was much much better before the reanimated updateFuckin lol <| sep |> it was fun while it lasted