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 Tomas Edison once stated , ‘ A genius is consisted of 1 % of inspiration and 99 % of hard work . ’ It would be ‘ a person who succeed is consisted of 1 % of luck and 99 % of hard work ’ to apply my thoughts about succeeding in Edison ’ s statement . I strongly believe that luck holds a very important part in getting successful achievements , and therefore , disagree with the quotation given . 
 In addition , luck is required in every day of our lives , hence it is a part that we cannot ignore . There is a statement in Buddhism , ‘ every relationship should be considered as precious , since they ’ re made from the smallest opportunity . ’ Even simply encountering a certain person is thought as meaningful , since luck has to be followed when starting a relationship in this world , full of millions of people , and there would be ‘ someone ’ who would help us to the right way of succeeding among them , which also needs luck . 
 Luck is , in other words , an opportunity . We need luck in almost every part of our lives : from meeting certain people to encountering certain important situations . Luck is something we cannot control , but act as a crucial key . This is why I believe that success cannot be achieved only by putting efforts , but a bit of luck always added . 
 그리고 시간 은 많이 줄여야 하 지만 ( ..) 이 정도 쓰 면 점수 가 얼마나 나올까 궁금 합니다 ㅎㅎ 
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