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 창작 이야기 에 요 ! 느낀 점 이랑 첨삭 부탁 드려요 ㅠㅠ 
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 “ One , two , three , four , five six , seven and eight ! Come on , girls ! Giant leaps ! Bigger ! Bigger ! ” 
 I jumped and took flight with higher leaps , my arms and legs stretching out , trying to look like I ’ m better than those who were so favoured by the teachers . I tried to plant a nice first impression on teachers at the start of the lesson . 
 Well , it was kind of easy to get the full attention at the beginning . When I walked in to the ballet studio , my heart filled with excitement , everybody was staring at me with their mouths open as if they saw a phantom or a monster . Some girls actually looked away and covered their eyes with their hands . Some girls were talking to each other about me , pointing at me , laughing . Even the teachers were quietly whispering , “ Who does she think she is ? I mean look at her . She obviously doesn ’ t belong here . ” 
 I knew my body from the outside . I felt the cold stares of people around me . I didn ’ t possess the graceful , fit bodies of the girls around me . Yet virtually , I still had their talents , no other better or worse than me . 
 We got to have a little bit of a rest after an hour . While I was sitting on a chair , drinking water , I examined other ballet dancers stretching and dancing . They were all in such a poised and elegant figures in every move they made . I was enjoying watching the dancers in a trance , when an annoying tapping on my shoulder woke me up . 
 “ Uh … Excuse me , what are you doing here ? ” 
 A girl with a blonde hair with legs that are almost the same size as my arms , and two other super skinny girls , asked me in a resentful voice . Well , it was an obvious question but I knew that there was a real meaning behind the question . I answered profoundly . 
 “ Oh , I ’ m here to learn ballet because I really like it . I decided to take some lessons here . I heard that this ballet school is the most renowned school and the teachers are really experienced and skilled . So if you guys wouldn ’ t mind , could you teach me some of ballet ? Like give me a little bit of an introduction to it . I ’ m Polly , by the way . Nice to meet you , guys ! ” 
 I smiled as hard as I can and waited for a reply . They glared at each other , laughing . It was an expected answer . Then the blonde girl started to speak , rubbing the tears off from her eyes . 
 “ Oh my god , do you seriously believe that you have talent ? We believe that you are incompetent in such a beautiful and elegant dance like ballet . And just to let you know , merely by looking at your ballet shoes and clothes , which are truly tacky and old , we kind of guessed what financial level you ’ re at . So , good luck with paying the fees for this school . Oh and yeah , let us give you an advice . Why don ’ t you go to gym first ? I doubt that you can hardly hold your weight up together . I saw you sweating and looking like you ’ re in pain throughout the whole lesson . Do not just loiter around here if you don ’ t have a perfect body figure like us . ” 
 Then they walked away with malicious looks in their faces . They didn ’ t even give me a chance to say something after . Wow , they didn ’ t even introduce themselves . I thought back about what they said . I remembered them saying , “ the cost of this school that you have to pay for is extremely expensive . I mean , can you afford that much ? ” They are probably very wealthy . Sometimes I imagined or daydreamed what the life would be if I was one of them . They have perfect body , fantastic ballet skills , teachers endorse them , they are so up themselves thinking they are so gorgeous and elegant , and their parents are wealthy enough to buy whatever things they need . Their life would be rich , proud , confident and basically the perfect life with no worries . 
 The class started again after lunch and the moves got harder and harder . In the middle of the lesson , when I was about to get into it , I needed to go to the toilet . I ran quickly to the toilet when I heard something inside the toilet . Somebody was coughing up vomit in one of the cubicles . It sounded like he or she was forcing the vomit to come out from his or her stomach . I waited for a while for it to finish . The person inside the cubicle was the blonde girl who talked to me before . Well , a bit harsher than talking . Her eyes and my eyes met and I could see tears in her eyes , telling me that she is going through a hard time . I got closer to her to pat her back and hug her but she pushed me away . I asked her , 
 “ Hey , are you okay ? Do you need to go to sickbay ? I heard you vomiting in the cubicle . It must have been the food that you had this lunch or it could be nausea from all the hard dancing we did . ” 
 “ Oh , I ’ m not saying that you ’ re bad and not capable of doing the hard dancing . You probably aced the dance we learnt today anyway . You are really good . ” 
 “ Don ’ t say things as if you know everything about me . ” 
 “ Oh , sorry . But it is true that you are perfect in ballet . ” 
 “ You don ’ t know anything about ballet . I bet you think all the ballet dancers are up themselves , boasting around other people and have a perfect life . Well , you got it wrong . Don ’ t prejudge ballet dancers on what you see . I hate it when people don ’ t acknowledge the fact that we spend hours and hours to just master one little step . ” 
 I was speechless . She paused for a minute and talked again . 
 “ I try so hard to be a good ballet dancer . A good ballet dancer ’ s mind needs to be lithe , flexible and supple to deliver the best performance . I diet and exercise to death to attain my coveted flexibility that no one else can have . Do you know what I was doing just then ? I was vomiting up the food that I ate at lunch because I ’ m scared that I am going to lose my body figure . People ’ s pressure kills me and I want to do and eat whatever I want , but my mum just pressures me all the time . That ’ s why I said harsh things about you before . I was jealous of you . You looked like you have freedom . I ’ m sorry . ” 
 She leaped into my arms and I embraced her saying that I am sorry that I did not understand those ballet dancers and their feelings and it ’ s ok . Everything is going to be okay . 
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