독립 형 첨삭 부탁 드립니다 . 감사 합니다 . ( pw : 6194 ) 라이팅 게시판 : : 고우 해 커스 
 독립 형 첨삭 부탁 드립니다 . 감사 합니다 . ( pw : 6194 ) 
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 Some people might think that one person can be happier through social life , not his job . However , in my opinion , one ’ s job can make his life happier or more depressed , and its effect might be stronger than that of social life for following two reasons . 
 To begin with , one ’ s job is extraordinarily important in his life because people at present spend most of their time working almost everyday . Therefore , if there were trouble in factors related with one ’ s job , he might get lots of stress during much times of a day . Suppose that you have a trouble with your coworker . Would it be possible for you to concentrate on your work without any stress or any concern ? The answer will be no . I now this from my personal experience . Last year , I had trouble with my colleague since we had different ideas about a problem , and it was difficult to meet in the middle . As a result , we could not make solution and I did not talk with him anymore . However , it was necessary for our to face and sit in the same space everyday . So , I should be concerned about him everytime and it was a huge stress for me to meet the person whom I did not like from early morning to night . 
 Moreover , factors which are relevant with jobs have also negative or positive impacts on one ’ s social life . This is because in materialistic society , money is emerged from job and if someone were short of money , he could not enjoy his social life . To be specific , most aspects of social life are correlated with one ’ s job . If you were poor or had no job , it might be difficult for you to meet friends . Or the same can be said when you had a job which is done in some illegal field . This is because in these societies , money and job are considered as one ’ s power and if someone had not good conditions in those , he would be ignored and there would be no space to stand in the society . In this regard , I will take my brother ’ s case as an example . Last year , my brother could not get a stable job , so he started an internship as a part time job . In this period , he did hardly meet his friends since he felt shame about himself . He probably had no confidence to meet his friends who have already stable jobs . However , before long , he finally was employed from a quite large company , and after that many things changed . He had meetings with them again , and furthermore , he was enthusiastic to make chances to meet them in order to boast his the new job . 
 To sum up , one ’ s job has impacts on his overall life including social jobs negatively or positively since many people spend most of their time in work and it can be also a kind of confidence or expression of self - esteem for him . In this regard , I firmly believe that one ’ s happiness would be more affected by one ’ s job than by his social life . 
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