Sorry that it's taken me so long to finally get to reviewing your entry but I'm here!

The thing that I found very interesting was the fact that it had been two years since Karly's brother had died and she still wasn't over it, I haven't read many stories that deal with handling grief over a long period of time like this so that was brand new for me.

That being said, I expected a little bit more in terms of Karly dealing with her brother's death, she was clearly not over it and there must've been something really special between this girl and her brother for her to be grieving for so long but I didn't really get that.

Also, when Victoire mentions that she's going to Healing school, it felt a little bit out of the blue for me because I don't remember her mentioning anything about wanting to become a Healer. She just kind of mentions it as if Karly already knows about her Healer plans when she's really only known her for one night (or maybe you did mention it and I've forgotten which could be a very real possibility).

But it was nice that Karly actually got a friend after that night that she got drunk at the bar and I think she and Victoire could be really great friends. I enjoyed reading this story.

This is a really good start! You've done a good job with making Victoire a kind of 'light in the darkness' for Karly, and set up the relationship well - I can tell already that Victoire is going to have a very positive effect on her, which is exactly what i want to see! The loss of her brother adds another dimension to her character, and I'm very interested to see where this is going! Good luck with the challenge and thanks for entering!