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 *Ok, dokey. This revert puts us square on the ""discuss"" portion of the BRD cycle. I feel that my changes aren't broadly transformative to the POV of the article, that they improve the flow (for reasons posted above) and that they can be supported by either side of this business. I see that this change specifically could generate some consternation and I'm more than happy to put that on the back burner (though a big quote shouldn't be leading the section, IMO). If I don't see some discussion here I'll assume that silence implies consent and go back to improving the article.   "