Uh, first, sorry, I meant Guy not Jay.  And second, you posted your note  on my talk page under the Marshack heading where a separate article about her that I didn't edit was being discussed, so, yeah, I didn't know which text you meant. I'm editing lots of articles in addition to Rockefeller.  I asked you politely to clarify, so thank you for clarifying.   As for your advice, I followed bold-revert-talk - the problem is that the editor who made 6 reverts in a day to the text would not.  The text in that section could indeed stand expansion, but I was trying to come up with the fourth point that you left out - consensus - by posting something that communicated what I think must be communicated, but was carefully worded and referenced  so as to perhaps last more than five minutes on the page.  So, if you have something to suggest about the specifics, I'm all ears.  But I was not playing games with my question above to you, so you didn't need to respond as if I was.