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 *""Traveling west-northwest, Two-C was initially in a favorable environment,"" - Again, don't refer to a TD like this. That's a number, not a name. 
 *""Kiko began to explosively deepen, and by 1800 UTC, it intensified into a Category 3 hurricane on the SSHWS, bypassing both Category 1 and 2 status."" - Because Kiko ""explosively deepen[ed]"", it isn't really necessary to mention that it skipped Category 1 and 2. 
 *""EPHC had revised their forecast and were now expecting the storm to accelerate"" -> ""EPHC revised their forecast and expected the storm to accelerate"" 
 *""Hurricane Kiko was responsible for 12 ft (3.7 m) waves along Newport Beach, California, resulting in more than 100 lifeguard rescues and rough seas."" - Because there was 12 foot waves, the part about rough seas at the end is not needed.  
 *""While the previous cyclone was dissipating, the next cyclone of the season was starting to form south of the Mexican coast."" - Kind of redundant and unnecessary. 
 *Moving west over warm waters, the disturbance was classified as a tropical depression about 90 mi (140 km) south of Acapulco early on September 6."" - Reword this to ""A disturbance moved westward across warm waters and intensified into a tropical depression about 90 mi (140 km) south of Acapulco early on September 6.""  
 *""the EPHC downgraded Lorena weakened into a Category 1 hurricane[2] as the storm was expected to emerge into the southern Gulf of California in about 48 hours and thereafter meander."" - What does the part after the reference have to do with the EPHC downgrading Lorena to a Category 1? Separate this with either a period or semi-colon.  
 *""Subsequently, Lorena attained its secondary peak with winds of 105 mph (170 km/h) while passing about 150 mi (240 km) south of Cabo San Lucas."" - Why mention a secondary peak? 
 *""combination of strong shear and very cold sea surface temperatures."" - The part about ""very cold sea surface temperatures"" could mean -25°F. P Was there a specific SST mentioned in the MWR? Even if there wasn't, don't use the term ""very cold"" 
 *""which found no evidence of an eyewall, thus, Manuel was downgraded into a tropical storm[6] about 600 mi (970 km) south of San Diego."" - What day did Manuel weaken to a tropical storm? 
 *""Several hours later, Manuel reached a secondary peak wind speed of 90 mph (140 km/h)."" - Again, why mention a secondary peak? 
 *""Guadalupe Island[2] before dissipating at 1200 UTC that day.[6]"" - We already know this was on September 20. So ""that day"" isn't needed. 
 *""Along the northern portion Baja California, Manuel brought showers and high waves"" - Why did you wikilink Baja California? That is like the 8th time you mentioned it. 
 *""Several hours after Manuel dissipated, a tropical disturbance formed 200 mi (320 km)"" -> ""Several hours after Manuel dissipated on September 20, a tropical disturbance formed 200 mi (320 km)"" 
 *""with winds of 50 mph (80 km/h), made its closet approach the Hawaii,"" - Narda had a closet? P 
 *""Campers were also ordered by police to find shelter on higher ground."" - Where were these campers at? (answer: coastal parks) 
 *""Tropical Octave was considered the worst flood in Pima County history."" - Missing a word? 
 *""It is also regarded as the worst tropical system to affect Arizona."" - What is the ""it""? The storm or Pima County? P 
 *""Around 3,000 buildings were destroyed due to Octave.[67] A total of 853 structures were destroyed by Octave while 2,052 others were damaged."" - These two sentences are confusing and contradictory. There were around 3,000 buildings destroyed and a total of 853 structures were also destroyed? Something is missing here. Maybe for the first sentence you meant, ""Around 3,000 buildings were impacted by Octave""? 
 *""In Mexico, 12 in (300 mm) was reported in Altar."" - 12 inches of what? Beer? P Also, wikilink Altar."