Opening section and continued need for improvement == 

 I've just gutted the opening section. It's still far from perfect, but the existing opening (while interesting) ran for nearly two full pages and accounted for over one-third of the entire article, much of which read like a cross between a sales pitch and a review. I started to edit the other sections, which seem to be written in a similar way, but it's been a long time since I read the book so I'm probably not the best man for the job.     

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