::::I actually didn't touch the article itself; someone else reverted it without my knowledge or encouragement.  I do appreciate your willingness to redo the section with secondary sources, and I agree with you that it helps bring a more encyclopedic tone to the article.  I disagree with you that the source I suggested is not suitable, but I'd be happy to agree to seek an outside consensus on that.  As far as helping with the rest of the article is concerned, I'm afraid the bulk of my limited Wikipedia time is being spent getting Yasin al-Qadi under control.  I'd recommend asking  for help; he's been editing for ages, knows his Mormon history, and is not an LDS apologist.  You might also try  who has helped intervene in disputes on Mormonism topics.  Either of these editors might also be able to refer others to recruit.  I wholly support your desire to revise those sections though, and I appreciate your interest in bringing higher quality to the article.  I might chip in when I can.