I liked the story overall but there are little things in the writing style that i don't like that is only accentuated by the narration. The characters don't talk like "real people". I am not instead of I'm not. It's like they are allergic to contractions, and the fact that these are southern bikers it makes it a bit jarring and it happens so often that it does detract from the story. 
 story - 3 
 narrator - 2 
 narrator's guy voices could use some work