Dear Author, 
 While I'm enjoying your story I guess it would be half as long if you would have simply stopped repeating yourself or indulged in the many tangents in your characters heads. It got kinda annoying and I found myself zoning out during those many episodes. 
 back to the story..... 
 yeah sick of the phrase "woo woo stuff" 
 back to the story..... 
 ok all done. Once you get over the other stuff I mentioned earlier the story isn't bad. I do have to say that although these military guys are tried to be portrayed as hardasses they are really REALLY in touch with there feelings. I mean REALLY in touch as in they spout poetry in their heads about how beautiful someone is or how that girl makes them feel. Not very hardass at all but hey, not my story...lol. 
 Story. 2.75 
 narrator 3