Plain English ToS - Is This Legal?
ErrantX: No. You should never write your own license - the same applies here. You will get it wrong (simply by not being a lawyer :)) and it wont cover what it is supposed to.Get a proper ToS drafted and then do what Creative Commons does with their licenses: do a page with just a few lines detailing in plain terms what it means (REALLY simple, what you wrote is far too complicated - the main off put for a ToS document is the wall of text) with a link to the actual legal document.